Board Thread:Roleplaying/@comment-27227983-20170603025806/@comment-27227983-20170604123431

SansyBonkChoy wrote: Name: Goner Kid

Class: Guardian

Moves:

First Follower's Ability(Offensive): Summon his head, going from right to left. Dealing damage to all enemies.

Second Follower's Ability(Offensive): Attack with his mini friend, shooting out laser. Deal damage to an enemy and that enemy have 25% to have a random DoT effect.

Third Follower's Ability(Defensive): Grand an ally and Goner Kid 50% damage reflect!

Goner Kid's Ability(Adrenaline): The whole team get no damage next turn.

Personality: Friendly, but sometime emotionless.

Background: Following Dr.W.D Gaster. But when the accident happen. He and all the other follower was trap in the void. Until now, they are free.

// Can you please make a non-Undertale related character? Give that game a break, it's over a year old.

Problems with your character:


 * Ability names are bland. Change them to something that sounds better, "Goner Kid" sounds like 4 people rather than just a singular character with those ability names.


 * First Follower's Ability would deal 5 damage to enemies.


 * Second Follower's Ability is confusing. Sorry if I sound like an idiot but what's a DoT effect?


 * Third Follower's Ability needs to be nerfed. How about this: Target ally gets damage reflect, but Goner Kid doesn't.


 * Goner Kid's Ability is weak. After the turn of getting no damage, they will get a 50% toughness boost for 2 turns?


 * Personality is Mary Sue-ish.


 * Background is a bit, bland and empty, providing only vague information. More details please.

//Or, you could make an original character, maybe? Just a tiny idea, since this game isn't really a game for crossovers.