Board Thread:Literature/@comment-5906901-20150413222608/@comment-5079138-20150413225435

Pretty nice story, but I found some clichés here:

...brutally stabbed it. Bloods almost covered the floor - Overly used in many creepypastas.

The screen went static... - Used in Sonic.exe trollpasta and many other Sonic.exe inspired creepypastas.

Next to the clock was a figurine of Takamaru, with black eye and red pupils, with blood dripping out of his eye - Overly used in lost episode creepypastas, including Squidward's Suicide.

But anyways, nice story there. I hope that you can also reduce the clichés so that it will become creepier.