Board Thread:Plants vs. Zombies Heroes/@comment-25083348-20171228001635/@comment-29637681-20180121203142

Tecku wrote: Here's my two cents: your fanfic is really good, and it's nice to see you experimenting. You have some good setups, a good foundational story. Your work clearly comes from a place of passion. You also know how to work in some imagination to your world-building, with mention of things the characters interact with. You also have some good comedy mixed in, like the Rustbolt gadget section.

That being said, there is one area you can improve upon, that being your character dialouge. Try pretending that you are the character, and ask youself "How would this personality in this situation choose their words." Tiny inflections and tones are small and subtle, but they're one of the two things that tend to seperate good fanfics from the outstanding ones. The other thing is story pacing, which comes to a writer more naturally over time. Keep up the good work! Thanks for your feedback.