Board Thread:Roleplaying/@comment-28270366-20170406111602/@comment-28270366-20170427145912

ThingOfTheStrangeMan wrote: Name: H'Thrun The Solar Crusher

Zombie Type: Supernova Gargantuar

Lore: H’Thrun secluded from the world living inside a mountain noticed something strange things were happening to the timelines seeing this he decided to leave his mountain obtaining information about what happened he eagerly set out to fix the timeline & crush all that oppose him

Gear:

Star Mace (Weapon) - Increase Physical attack & HP

Cosmic Z Armor (BodyGear) - Increases Damage resistance Magic resistance & Hp

Cosmic Z Head Gear (Helmet) increases Attack & Hp

Cosmic Z Leggings (Leg Gear) Increases attack & Hp regeneration

Trait: Cosmic Charge - Every 3 rounds H’Thrun gains a cosmic charge he can spend 1 Charge to empower an ability

Ability’s:

Supernova Slam: H’thrun slams the ground with his weapon dealing damage to enemy’s around when empowered with a cosmic charge all enemy’s hit are slowed

Blackhole Pummel: H’thrun pummels an opponent for low damage then a blackhole appears next to H’thrun dealing damage over time to all opponents when empowered with a cosmic charge nearby enemies are pulled closer towards the black hole every round

Asteroid Shoot: H’Thrun pulls an asteroid down into the atmosphere hitting an area in a circle aoe enemies hit by this are inflicted with a DoT when empowered with a cosmic charge the area this ability affects increases and damage increases

Ultimate:

Gravity Crush: H’Thrun increases the gravity around him many fold severely slowing all enemies around him & decreasing the damage they deal they are also inflicted with strong DoT

Ok well heres my Zombie Character

//Sorry if I was late in reacting yours. Busy times. Anyway, after this, I might have just skip the tutorial and get on with the actual game (and you will be in once you give me your plant character).

Gears

Certain concerns regarding your gear: You can't have akl your gear to modify your attack. Only weapons and sometimes off-hand items can modify attack.


 * Star Mace (Weapon): This will only improve your physical attack and magical power. Your spells do magical power.


 * Cosmic Z-Armor (Bodygear): This will likely improve your HP, EP, and physical armor.


 * Cosmic Z-Helmet (Headgear): Renamed it to not sound too obvious. Improves EP, HP and EP regen, and magical resistance.


 * Cosmic Z-Leggings (?): You won't really need this because pure obviousness (and the fact that it could be one with your bodygear). I'll replace this with Giga-lactic Hover Treads, which improves your movement.

Abilities:


 * Trait - Cosmic Charge: Is it just me, or does this ability look and function similar to Kael'thas' Verdant Spheres in Heroes of the Storm? Anyway, you can store up to 3 charges, consume 1 charge to power-up an ability, and you can also decide to power-up your whole basic attack by consuming all your charges. That will work.


 * Supernova Slam: This makes you slam the ground, dealing physical damage around you. When powered-up, slows enemies by 30%. This'll work.


 * Blackhole Pummel: How about this. You create a black hole on a target area, enemies on there receives magical damage over time and slowing them. When empowered, damage is increased and enemies are slowly dragged to the center.


 * Asteroid Shoot: So you crash down an asteroid from space on a 3x3 area, dealing magical damage to enemies and burning them, dealing damage over time. When empowered, area increases and so does damage. This'll work.


 * Ultimate - Gravity Crush: So this persist around you, and moves along with you. The area is 5x5, damage over time is magical, and attack damage reduction to enemies is 30/40/50%. This will be the only item that doesn't benefit to cosmic charge. This'll work.

Others:

Lore - Your lore is too plain boring. How about I improve it...

"H'Thrun is a gargantuar from the evil galaxies far away who seeks to destroy any dying star and galaxy to its resting core. He often resides on a mountain that he owned, watching over the cosmos for incoming danger. But when space and time gets distorted, he lost his power and the only way to fuel it is to consume the stars. He seeks to fix this paradox to restore his powers, but comes with a very great price."

Grammar - Yes, I notice this in any thread. Your sentences sometimes lack punctuations and correct capitalizations. Well, at least you spell something a bit correct. I'm not criticizing you, I'm not saying it's bad, just improve it more. You can do that.